...which was over 65 was quite stable throughout the four years.

Vicky_D

Senior Member
chinois
Hi,
I'm confused about the Attributive Clause.

"Also, the whole period witnessed a rise in nearly all age groups except for the group which was over 65 was quite stable throughout the four years. "

or

"Also, the whole period witnessed a rise in nearly all age groups except for the group over 65 which was quite stable throughout the four years."

Which one is correct ?

Thank you for your help !
 
  • grassy

    Senior Member
    Polish
    1) doesn't work for me. 2) is fine, but I would place a comma before 'which' because I think the information that comes right after it is additional and thus not essential to identifying the antecendent.
     

    kentix

    Senior Member
    English - U.S.
    I would add an additional comma.

    "Also, the whole period witnessed a rise in nearly all age groups, except for the group over 65, which was quite stable throughout the four years."

    I don't know what was stable, though, and what rose so I'm not sure the sentence is entirely correct. A rise in what? You're talking about a group being stable but some factor rising. I'm not sure you can mix those two like that.
     
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