Which is known in the forum as a rewrite.I am not asking to rewrite it but to provide a short casual, colloquial and idiomatic equivalent.
"You know" sounds a bit too trite. I need something somewhat oafish that a 8-year-old, unsophisticated child feeling awkward would use to start a sentence with a touch of delicate yet uncouth shyness.What specific part of the sentence concerns you? If you can tell us that, we can help.
Yes, this is close to what I'd like to have, however, "Hey" sounds a bit too assertive. I need something coy.An oafish 8-year-old might start with "Hey", and he would probably not use a long sentence. He might say "Hey, keep in touch, OK?"
I need something somewhat oafish that a 8-year-old, unsophisticated child feeling awkward would use to start a sentence with a touch of delicate yet uncouth shyness.
"Look" or "Umm" are used in a much wider variety of contexts and do not have a specific emotional connotation in spoken English that I am looking for."Look..." might do the job.
Would this be a British 8-year-old or an American one...or should it sound neutral? A girl or a boy? Is this speech or an email?